I need desperate help writing my thesis statement. I need to be pointed in the right direction or provided with

I need desperate help writing my thesis statement. I need to be pointed in the right direction or provided with

useful information if possible.

My thesis statement needs to indicate a comparison/contrast of Roman and Greek education against the Biblical standards for teaching and training. It should answer the following questions:

-What did they do well?

-What did they leave out?

-How did they fall short of the Biblical standard?

I have submittied two thesis statements below that have been rejected. Can someone please further explain what I am missing?

Attempt #1: The foundation of the Judeo-Christian foundation on biblical text focuses on prompting empathy and caring for others because they are family under the biblical teachings showing that “God” is the father of all humankind.

Attempt #2: Science, medicine and technology embarked in 3,000 B.C., sustaining to grow until 476 A.D. which continued due to individuals and resources accessible.

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